I need a proof-reader!

I'm currently writing stories, as you may have figured my the corresponding section and/or my latest (ie. first) entry, and I am in desperate need of an "editor", someone who would be gracious enough to review what I've written so far and give me any pointers, tell me anything I should change, what's perfect the way it is, etc. This would be vastly appreciated.

Anyone interested could either leave a comment, or send me an eMail. It's nothing complicated; I just send over the few pages I've typed up, the critic reviews it and points out any flaws they think should be weeded out or corrected, and I do so.

Note – I'm afraid anyone wishing for a pay in doing this would be disappointed. Not that I'm cheap – I honestly haven't got a friggin' cent. =( Perks of being an unemployed 17-year-old, I suppose. (*Err*)

Thanks! =)